A Work in Progress

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  1. LizK

    LizK Sort of lurker

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    Because whatever those novels are about don't interest you as much as Vega and Talon and co.
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  2. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Those two are much more "real" in my head than, say, Kane Hammerstrom or Debra Malken (lead characters in two of my novels) and therefore much easier for me to write. So there is plenty of truth in what you say.
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    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Yeah, turns out 5500 words wasn't even a quarter of the way finished. This story is currently at 25,162 words - I've been working on it tonight - and is still not completed. Yoiks.
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    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    It's done. Holy Mother of God, it's done. First draft is wrapped up and clocks in at 27,805 words.

    Maybe now I can go back to working on my novel.
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  5. LizK

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    Congrats!!!!!!
  6. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Here's the last in my "superheroes on bristol" series. There's so much wrong with this picture that I'm not even sure why I'm posting it. Character's name is Valhalla. The piece was done in August of 1995.

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  7. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Went down to Fort Hunt Park this afternoon and took a sketchpad with me. This is what I did:

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  8. LizK

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    Beautiful
  9. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Fort Hunt Park with a sketchpad again. This is from a photo of my wife.

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    Dinner 2012 & 2014 Master Prognosticator

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    Why did you sit on these for 20 years? They look like player characters from the old Champions game.
  11. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    I only recently got a large-format scanner. The originals are all 11x17.
  12. jack

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    Cool thread. I'm going to take my time to read your writings, but I love your drawings. Great fun.
  13. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Attached is what I have written of the novel I'm working on. Let's see what you think.

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  14. John Castle

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    Okay, Lanz, I can tell you immediately that this is not how I want to be introduced to a character.

    Now, here's why:

    The physical can be delivered to me at (or near) the front end of what she's doing. What she's doing is always how I want to meet her. Layer the physical onto that. Tell me about her long, deft fingers as they dance on the keypads. Tell me about her lithe body as she scurries up into places she shouldn't be. Tell me about the strange sins her eyes are as she plants the explosives.

    But here's the key: Depending on her role in the story, don't go too crazy on detail. For example, if she's your main protag, you don't even tattle as to whether she's a blonde, a brunette, a raven, or a redhead. I bet you know why.

    Sorry, EDIT EDIT: This is in relation to the female character you described, not your novel-WIP.
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    I like it. I really like it. Compared to my own personal taste, the prose is rather Spartan, but that's a matter of personal style. You do it well.
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    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Which thing are you referencing here?
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    The character sheet. But it's not your fault -- you did in a character sheet exactly what's supposed to be done in a character sheet. I was only saying that a character sheet isn't how I like to meet a new character. I wanna see her walkin' and talkin', like Petrelya in the WIP you posted.
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    Oh, well yeah. It's a character sheet, not a story as such.
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    Yup. She sounds like an amazing character; maybe that's my problem with it. The character sheet is sketching a character that has me saying, "Aw, c'mon! Let's see her at work already!" :)
  20. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Did some sketchbook work today. Colored pencils, which I haven't used in about fifteen years. This is Winter, one of the seasons. I'll eventually get around to doing Spring, Summer, and Autumn to go with her.
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    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Found an old sketch of Jetman going thru some papers today. This was done in April of 1989. The original is on computer printer fanfold paper, if you're old enough to remember what that is. What that really means is I must have been very bored on the night shift at work one evening. I chopped it out of its background in Pixelmator because you could see the green and white lines of the fanfold thru from the other side of the paper. Pencil, black marker and colored pencil.

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  22. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    And started this year's National Novel Writing Month with a 2776-word whack at it. This year's effort is called Charter Unknown. Linky.
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    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    5149 words in on Day 2. This pace gets me to 50000 words by 20 November, well ahead of the end-of-month deadline. IF I can keep it going.
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  24. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    9057 words in. Got a late start tonite and I'm just very tired. But damn, it feels good to be writing again. :techman:
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  25. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    I've fallen off pace. :( I just passed 21000 words and I should be above 25000 by now. Still crankin' tho.
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  26. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Here's what I have of this year's NaNoWriMo story, for any who are interested.

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  27. LizK

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    Better 21000 you are pleased with than 25000 you decide you must change
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    My first attempt with water-soluble colored pencils. Just a quick sketch in pencil, inked with a brush marker and colored with el cheapo colored pencils and a waterbrush. Messed up a lot of stuff on this, but since it's really just to play with the pencils and see how they work . . . eh. The "glow" is just metallic watercolor. I did do it on 140lb cold-press watercolor paper, tho. Just so it wouldn't warp and buckle when wet. Michael's was having a sale this past weekend and I got a 30-sheet pad of 9x12 inch Canson watercolor paper for 50% off. Can't beat that with a stick.

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  29. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Quick sketch, fast and loose. Graphite pencil on newsprint.

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    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Another seagull sketch, this time charcoal on newsprint. Charcoal isn't as forgiving as graphite. Smudges easily, too. There's some proportion issues here and I didn't do any color corrections to the scan, so this is how it came off the deck.

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