Star Trek Section 7G: A Private Little Clusterfuck

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  1. The Night Funky

    The Night Funky BMF Staff Member Moderator

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    Questions? Comments? Criticisms? I apologize for the length. I had no idea going into this that it would wind up being quite so long. Has to be one of the longest "fuck you's" ever written, I think. I hope that it didn't drag too much in spots, and that I didn't screw up continuity. Writing in ~600 word blocks is harder than I thought.
  2. Spaceturkey

    Spaceturkey you can't spell hatred without "red hat"

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    my only let down was that somewhere it turned into a pretty decent star trek tale and stopped being a satirical play on plot holes.
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  3. The Night Funky

    The Night Funky BMF Staff Member Moderator

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    Sorry about that, I started out "priming the pump" watching a sitcom that had the right tone, but before I finished, I ran out of episodes to watch, and I couldn't find anything else that had the right tone to take its place.
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    Yeah, I started :zzz: during major parts of the "on the planet" portion of the story. Too long, too little humor, don't really give a fuck about the primitives on the planet. Shorten that part up a ton. Also need to tighten up the whole narrative on constructing the self-defense grid for the planet. Or add more humor to it. Or both.
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