I'm new to this...but: life, poetry, and other stuff.

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  1. [theDarkest_noir]

    [theDarkest_noir] restless soul.

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    I've been cleaning out my computer and found some things I had written last year. Thought it was interesting, cause I've been trying to write things down lately...develop my writing some. I plan on traveling and writing, and have been playing guitar for almost 8 years as well as drums and plan on pursuing music... I have thoughts and ideas...just trying to find a way to express them. I don't know if I consider myself a poet, or a musician, or a photographer,...or any of the things I do...and I've barely shared with anyone, and never shown these...oh fuck it. These are my thoughts, I am not ashamed.

    tell me what you think.
    and they may not all be complete thoughts...

    these are the old, the more recent are in a notebook the NocturneO'VladJazz has in Indy, and I may continue to post.
    This is about a girl...we got together during our senior year making the musical West Side Story. Thus the title...


    1950's Gang-Related Love Crimes

    Oh Maria,
    Did you care
    Or was it just a sensation
    For the moment, simply fleeting

    Did I touch you how you wanted
    In your heart, or in your bed
    Not sure what went on up there
    Even to this day

    I remember when we danced
    Watched you sing
    from the side of the stage
    Still as beautiful to this day

    Though we never ended
    A part of us died
    You were gone still locked inside
    Lying to yourself about the truth

    And I hear whispers on the wind
    Of how you’re doing now
    Lost in space, but finding out
    Love is more than just a feeling


    This was after one of my first experiences in a club last year, basically just an account.

    Clubbin' Ain't Easy

    The night is perfect
    If being deaf is your thing
    Cause the music is pumped up way too loud
    And I’m sitting here by myself when it happens

    This girl sat right next to me
    Told me I looked pissed
    That’s a funny way to start a conversation
    “no I’m just tired”

    She was working up a good drunk
    This her 20th birthday and all
    Great way to start a new year of your life
    Without memories

    After some small talk
    I ask her to dance
    Had to finish her drink, and watch her friend
    Another bottle down

    We ended up on the floor
    Her friend missing again
    She danced for a bit
    But something was off

    Ended up abandoning hope for people I knew
    Even good company can’t beat this noise
    They’ve all had their fill
    Just waiting for something to feel

    We find her again, our bottles in hand
    cigarette sounds nice
    she had herself another few rounds
    Pre-meds must not have time for fun

    Last few drops go down easy
    As we laugh at our future
    The rest of the group leaving
    Should just cash in and go

    Said my goodbyes
    Stole a last look around
    Made it out pretty clean
    Should have asked for her number
    Wonder if she’s alright
    Wonder if she remembers me
    Clubbin' ain't easy...


    I guess I just feel like sharing all kinds of stuff right now...
    here's a video of me messing around on guitar...nothing serious, nothing organized.



    and they'll be more to come...unless you really really hate it. Then I guess I can stop...but I hope that is not the case.
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  2. [theDarkest_noir]

    [theDarkest_noir] restless soul.

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    experimenting with a wah pedal
  3. [theDarkest_noir]

    [theDarkest_noir] restless soul.

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    I can't figure out how to post a video from Youtube on here.
  4. Nocturne of Vladimir Jazz

    Nocturne of Vladimir Jazz And Hell's comin' with me!

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    On the reply menu, just above the text box, there's an icon of Earth with a little chain on it. Click that, and paste the URL in there.
  5. [theDarkest_noir]

    [theDarkest_noir] restless soul.

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  6. IndigoTiger

    IndigoTiger Violently Happy

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    hey, i just went and took a look at some of you photography on ur myspace page...thats pretty awesome. i love ur work.
  7. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    This kind of thing would probably go better in the Workshop.
  8. [theDarkest_noir]

    [theDarkest_noir] restless soul.

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  9. [theDarkest_noir]

    [theDarkest_noir] restless soul.

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    Ahhh...I thought it felt a bit off. Thanks man.
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    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Moving to the Workshop. Whoooooooosh!!!