Just a little something.

Discussion in 'The Workshop' started by skinofevil, Jul 13, 2012.

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  1. skinofevil

    skinofevil Fresh Meat

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    That's generally how I revise; yes, all revisions are similar to that one.
    skinofevil, Sep 9, 2012
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  2. Lanzman

    Lanzman Vast, Cool and Unsympathetic Formerly Important

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    Yep, second version is much tighter and more satisfying than the overbloated first cut.
    Lanzman, Sep 9, 2012
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