Rant About Work - TKO's way!

This is basically a little rant journal I'm writing just for laughs. I could use some help with it.
I'll post a few paragraphs once in a while, little exceprts, and see what y'all think.
Mmay?

okay cool.


Excerpt on McDonald's Managers:
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There’s as many different types of managers as there are different types of managers’ shirts. We’ve got Floor Supervisors (“manager”-type positions for people under 18), Certified Swing Managers, a head manager for the store, sometimes there’s a store owner (depending on the restaurant), managers that oversee several stores, and there’s even a manager for Grill! It really wouldn’t surprise me if we had a manager in charge of tray-wiping. There’s so many managers at any given time, too, that when a customer asks me “Is your manager there?” I feel like saying, “Yes. We’ve got three of them in right now. Take your pick.” I usually don’t have time to, though, because the customer will usually start nagging before I can even think of who the managers in charge are that day. (...)

I go on to about 3 different topics after this. It's about 3 pages long. I don't want to post the whole thing 'cause it's gonna be HUGE, but I'm thinking my humor is becoming extremely dry, maybe too harsh. Any tips??