Starting a new story

Set aboard UES Discovery, a UESPA vessel (the NX-01) commanded by Captain Jonathon Archer of Earth Command. The story takes place in 2154, the 4th year of her mission.

More to come.

Since the original Trek draft called the ship the USS Yorktown, I urge that.

Up to about 35 pages and progressing nicely. I won't be posting this one until it's all done. What I've got right now are basically two concurrent story threads that will clash and merge in the final act. I can't really give a synopsis without spoilering the whole thing- you're gonna have to make the discoveries along with the crew.

Update: still working on it at a sluggish pace. I'm not happy with much of it so it's kind of getting procrastinated on...

How much of that universe have you rebooted?

Quite a bit. I include a short timeline at the beginning to bring you up to speed. Basically I decanonise most of Enterprise, keep the characters, and go with UESPA. But it doesn't have that big an impact on the story.

But what about the Borg ship that crashed in the Arctic?

And the (unnamed) Ferengi that got aboard Enterprise?

You can't leave those vital elements of the canon out!

Don't make me ban you. I can do it now, you know.

As the author of the tale, I am way worse than Crewman Daniels and Futureguy could ever be...

Head's up- This project has NOT been abandoned. It's still in work...

Okay, finished it. It's at 70+ pages double spaced right now, and I need to go through it for the final edit and wordsmithing, etc.

With the gallery down, is there anywhere you guys know of that I can host a pdf file for download when it's ready? photobucket is only good for pics...

Can't wait to read it.

Marso...? Marso...?

Hello?

I know, I know. It's sitting on my hard drive waiting for that final run through. I hope to have it done by the end of the weekend, but I'm actually at work right now so my time isn't as much my own as it is at home...

Insert Cool Movie Guy Voice :

"What if you woke up one day and found out that your entire existance, has been a lie?"

"Your time line, your history, manipulated and...damaged beyond repair."

"The clock is ticking and one brave starship from a doomed alternate time must decide which reality lives (Insert image of original Enterprise with fade to Kirk&Spock) or dies!"

(Cut to scene of Daedalus class ship zooming towards audience.)

Scott Bakula, Jolene Blalock, Connor Trinneer.

Star Trek : Discovery!

Boldly Go : November 2007

didja at least get rid of T'Pol?

No, T'Pol is still there, but you can see the winds of change blowing at the end of the tale. That's all I can say without being spoierific.

The heart of this story is a hard moral and ethical choice for Archer- some people probably won't agree with how he goes here. You'll just have to remember that it's pre-Federation Earth Command, not starfleet.

IT'S DONE!!

Woot!

As of now, with the Gallery tits up, I have no place to host this sucker. It's a 71 page .PDF file. Anyone who wants a copy PM me your email address and I'll fire it to you.

-JM.

Can't you just attach it?

Perhaps. I'm not sure how to do that.

Advanced Reply (post reply), then scroll down until you see the "manage attachments" button. Self-explanatory from there.

Ok, attempting to attch the file here...

Here goes....

I've been contemplating writing another story or two in this milieu. I'll wait until I get some feedback (if any) before deciding. I've got a couple ideas floating around the brainpan...

(We need an Orion smiley...)

Heh, good luck.

Other than a few spelling and wording nitpicks, I only had one major gripe with the whole thing: the idea that a ship could orbit a moon of a gas giant, while making major changes to a planetary system, and remain there for 40,000 years, completely undetected, in an area between the future-Federation and the Romulan Star Empire, especially with Orions in the area. As a result, I have trouble believing that a species with technology to keep themselves frozen for tens or hundreds of thousands of years wouldn't have something to deal with intruders that started poking around their cryochambers, whether that's simply an automated wake up script or something more lethal. And if I realized that, Archer, or at least T'Pol, should have realized that.

Sounds like my premise stretched your suspension of disbelief too far. Not good.

Thanks for the feedback though!

Haven't gotten to it yet, but I will!

I've read it.

Aside from only one capitalization error - "Rubicon" is a name of a river and should've been capitalized...what really struck me as cool was the naval jargon. "Set condition one throughout the ship" and the like. I liked that a lot. It provided a connection to our time that was lacking in the series. Earth's first starship, I always thought, would rather have more of a "Crimson Tide" feel aboard than the later 23rd century Starfleet.

Plus the story was pretty good. Space is really big and I didn't see a problem with a colony ship being out there unnoticed, especially in a system with no habitable (as yet) planets. The situation Marso describes could well go unnoticed save by a human or a Vulcan; Romulans and Orions, for example, wouldn't closely look at uninhabited systems, methinks, because as our own initial studies of extrasolar systems indicates, those systems are really a dime a dozen.

Good stuff...hell, Marso, put me on your mailing list.

Not only was the AD-IIE System uninhabited, it contained no Class M worlds, which would make it uninteresting to most passers-by. But yes, that was sort of my thought process there, along with the fact that in 2154, primitive sensor technology and a max speed of Warp 4.8 would serve to make space a lot vaster and emptier than in later series. Could be that the Enterprise D or E might detect that ship from light years away- the point was that the UES Discovery and her counterparts of the mid 22nd century could not- at least until they got a lot closer because they were investigating something else.

So, question for Phantom and Order to Chaos: In your opinion, who was right? T'Pol or Archer? Spoiler your answers, if you don't mind. Don't want to give it all away...